Just make it the way you want it to look, not everyone will think it's great. As long as your satisfied with your work, that is all that matters.
Just some ideas that you might want to try, I watched it lastnight. Your views seem to jump around a lot, you might want to ignore recorded views. This will give you more control on what you want to focus on.
I don't know if it is your vid card or the compression your using, but it is coming out real grainy at a small size. You might want to try saving it as an AVI in film viewer, but the codec, use uncompressed. It will give you a clean look, now this isn't the final product... look into virtual dub. It's a great program to compress AVI's with the codec you want. Now saving an avi uncompressed will eat up memmory, so you want to make "Clips", not "Events or Tracks" with it. Clips make up events, and events make up tracks. Now after your done with the uncompressed file just delete it.
Hope this helps you out. Your on the right track... just keep them coming.
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