Your film felt like I was flying a regular sortie in Aces High with some wierd music playing in the background.
Things I found disturbing1. It had no real starting point or ending.
1b. A good starting point for example would be taking off or being leveled out heading towards a target and a good ending would be landing or hitting your target. It sets and finishes your story.
2. The camera angles included shots of you switching angles in the film viewer.
2b. Try to clip your shots so that it only shows the shots you want. Watching someone switch to a different angles doesn't add to the story and it ends up being pointless and unintresting to watch. Unless, of course, you want the added effect of some panning shots.
3. The music.
3b. What in the world was that stuff! LOL! I can understand if this was meant as a comedy, otherwise change it! I don't think your story was about a fairy wonderland and nice things. More about shooting and killing things in an high-speed aircraft. Pick your music appropriately.
4b. If it's possible, try not to include game glitches; it degrades your film.
Overall, just watch some good movies and see how directors shoot and clip their films and apply it to Aces High movies. Also try to make the story in your movie. Every movie has an interesting story, otherwise it reminds people of the some old dull life that they could live themselves. If your movie is about killing 6 guys, somehow emphasize on that issue! For example: Every kill you make, have it count the number kill on the screen. Most importantly, use your creativity!
Good luck Mechanic! I hope you don't take this critique as a bash on your movie. I'm just trying to help and give ya some ideas and comments.
-Paul
