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General Forums => The O' Club => Topic started by: 321BAR on April 29, 2012, 03:04:16 PM
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Read it and tell me what you guys think please. Good or bad i'd just like feedback.
One passionate voice,
Can lead a nation to a path full of choice,
Can end a world of war and greed,
Can end the worry of millions of what to feed,
Their sons and daughters during the night,
One voice can lead a world in this fight.
One voice can fuel the fire in the heart,
Let two find the way for love to start,
Or let a child live to cherish the beauty around us,
And let it have possibilities to learn to trust,
Let the lusting realize the act of compassion,
While the sloth can be put into action.
It can free a human from their wrong acts,
And let the ignorant see the truth of facts.
It can unite a whole nation in equality,
Or let others see one person’s true quality.
One voice can end suffering and one’s pain,
And let a poor man see what life he can gain.
A single voice can do all of this,
It can counter another’s anger and iron fist,
Do you have this passion? Do you have that voice?
Can you save a person from the wrongdoing of a single choice?
If this is too opinionated please let me know. I only posted on the forums because i believe it isn't. <S>
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Wow man nice :), i like it
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Wow man nice :), i like it
thanks bro :aok been writing for years now. not public with most of it and some too opinionated for these boards also <S>
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I like it... a lot. The tone is one challenge, but I didn't find it opinionated. Good work.
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I like it... a lot. The tone is one challenge, but I didn't find it opinionated. Good work.
i tried to push it for a hit at the end but it was hard to do it in 10 minutes :lol
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:aok :cheers:
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:aok
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thanks guys :aok
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:aok
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i tried to push it for a hit at the end but it was hard to do it in 10 minutes :lol
I have an idea.....
Read it and tell me what you guys think please. Good or bad i'd just like feedback.
One passionate voice,
Can lead a nation to a path full of choice,
Can end a world of war and greed,
Can end the worry of millions of what to feed,
Their sons and daughters during the night,
One voice can lead a world in this fight.
One voice can fuel the fire in the heart,
Let two find the way for love to start,
Or let a child live to cherish the beauty around us,
And let it have possibilities to learn to trust,
Let the lusting realize the act of compassion,
While the sloth can be put into action.
It can free a human from their wrong acts,
And let the ignorant see the truth of facts.
It can unite a whole nation in equality,
Or let others see one person’s true quality.
One voice can end suffering and one’s pain,
And let a poor man see what life he can gain.
A single voice can do all of this,
It can counter another’s anger and iron fist,
Do you have this passion? Do you have that voice?
Can you save a person from the wrongdoing of a single choice?
Do you have.....the "QUUUAAAAAAAHHHHH"?
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Put that to music and you've got a hit! :rock
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Put that to music and you've got a hit! :rock
:lol it needs alot more tweaking and work if you want a hit single out of something like that...
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No Quah? No Cheezits? The RedBull does not approve. :mad:
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No Quah? No Cheezits? The RedBull does not approve. :mad:
Shaddup Noob, this is quality work :D, the MEGA aprroves it :bolt:
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pretty damn good man...hell of a lot better then I could do.
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jk man, great work bar, had to yank your chain :D
:cheers: :salute bud
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thanks guys :aok been trying to get something better than that but just no time to do it lately :(
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Here I sit broke and battered
My plane of choice is torn and tattered
I upped a spit to save the day
and got called a spit dweeb
for upping that way
I engaged 4 cons above the field
they twisted and turned and refused to yield
I shot down three but before I knew it
the fourth was on my six, I think I blew it
I cried in vain "wheres the help?"
I began to split S and continued to yelp
My plaintive cries brought no friends
so I guess I"ll just have to up again...........
EZRhino 2012
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Here I sit broke and battered
My plane of choice is torn and tattered
I upped a spit to save the day
and got called a spit dweeb
for upping that way
I engaged 4 cons above the field
they twisted and turned and refused to yield
I shot down three but before I knew it
the fourth was on my six, I think I blew it
I cried in vain "wheres the help?"
I began to split S and continued to yelp
My plaintive cries brought no friends
so I guess I"ll just have to up again...........
EZRhino 2012
:rofl
thats awesome
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Here I sit broke and battered
My plane of choice is torn and tattered
I upped a spit to save the day
and got called a spit dweeb
for upping that way
I engaged 4 cons above the field
they twisted and turned and refused to yield
I shot down three but before I knew it
the fourth was on my six, I think I blew it
I cried in vain "wheres the help?"
I began to split S and continued to yelp
My plaintive cries brought no friends
so I guess I"ll just have to up again...........
EZRhino 2012
:rofl :rofl :aok