A little bit better, you mixed up the camera angles. A question, are you recording your films from the FV (Film Viewer) or direct from the game? If you're recording from the Film viewer try turning off the icons in the massive furballs that way Fraps doesn't have to record all the data being displayed on the icons and the end result is an extra few frames per second.
Now, here's a few more suggestions:
1. When using external views, zoom in on your plane, almost right next to it. That way we as the viewers can see what you're doing and what you're looking at (your target). It also gives the viewer a chance to enjoy the skin you're using.
2. Once again, the music got in the way. I decided to turn it off once I realized there were no game sounds being played. Music will degrade a film when there's Profanity and/or sexual references in them. So that is why I recommend soundtracks. (Yes, I saw your message that this music is all you have.)