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Offline LYNX

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Life after Death
« on: November 04, 2009, 11:41:06 AM »
Life after death

There are those that believe in it and those that don't.  Then there are those of us who have experienced it.

I am getting into writing and have written about an experience I had as a child.  It's in the link below (1362 words long) to save space here.

http://barronbourne.blogspot.com/

Feel free to comment on the story but please don't turn it into a religious thing.  I especially welcome critics on my writing...good and bad.  That in all honesty is what I'm looking for.

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Re: Life after Death
« Reply #1 on: November 04, 2009, 12:07:01 PM »
How much of the knowledge do you believe/feel you kept in tact when you came back?
It is something I wonder as we all know that there is much more to learn than we have time for, or should I say believe we have time for. This way of thinking is what, I believe stops us from truly accepting and opening up to what is about us. Experiences of this nature (being shown all) happens to others in other ways and only understand or know that they have experienced this information through hypnosis.
Also do you know how long you were gone for?

As for the writing...I know nothing about it, other than you read it...this I felt was easy to read and kept me wanting to continue....even when it stopped...give me more, give me more.

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Re: Life after Death
« Reply #2 on: November 04, 2009, 12:28:18 PM »
Very interesting! That was very well written LYNX, I do read often and I can tell you that was one of the better books! The only thing I can criticize that for is a few punctuation errors, but I got the message all the same. :)
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Re: Life after Death
« Reply #3 on: November 04, 2009, 01:51:54 PM »
"For the majority of use" should be "For the majority of us..."

"Aided in our passing by medication administered by caring yet comparative strangers." is a sentence fragment.
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Re: Life after Death
« Reply #4 on: November 04, 2009, 02:46:43 PM »
Well done Lynx.  Again, a few grammatical and punctuation errors, but a good read, very captivating.
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Re: Life after Death
« Reply #5 on: November 04, 2009, 03:54:36 PM »
How much of the knowledge do you believe/feel you kept in tact when you came back?
It is something I wonder as we all know that there is much more to learn than we have time for, or should I say believe we have time for. This way of thinking is what, I believe stops us from truly accepting and opening up to what is about us. Experiences of this nature (being shown all) happens to others in other ways and only understand or know that they have experienced this information through hypnosis.
Also do you know how long you were gone for?

As for the writing...I know nothing about it, other than you read it...this I felt was easy to read and kept me wanting to continue....even when it stopped...give me more, give me more.

Thanks for reading.  Glad you enjoyed it.  I will finish the story which has other classic life after death symptoms....for want of a better word.  As for "remembering"  I'm afraid it wasn't saved.  Much like working on your PC and you have an unexpected power out.  I'm not afraid of death though...just the means of getting there  ;)

This whole episode didn't seem to last much more than a minute as fare as I was aware.

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Re: Life after Death
« Reply #6 on: November 04, 2009, 04:10:53 PM »
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Very interesting! That was very well written LYNX, I do read often and I can tell you that was one of the better books! The only thing I can criticize that for is a few punctuation errors, but I got the message all the same.

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Well done Lynx.  Again, a few grammatical and punctuation errors, but a good read, very captivating.

Thanks lads.  I know I'm weak on the punctuation.  I fear this is going to be a repetitive theme with my writing.  It always has.  Thanks for reading though.

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"For the majority of use" should be "For the majority of us..."

"Aided in our passing by medication administered by caring yet comparative strangers." is a sentence fragment.

Thanks for that ...dunno why I put an "e" in there.  i get what your saying about fragmented.  I've changed it and another sentence at the end of the second paragraph.  It didn't seem to flow right.

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Re: Life after Death
« Reply #7 on: November 04, 2009, 08:30:01 PM »
Definitely different, I liked it.

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Re: Life after Death
« Reply #8 on: November 05, 2009, 06:34:47 AM »
Very very interesting reading LYNX and very well written.

However I didn't like the technological references, barcode readers, MS or uploading. While they may be even unclear to somebody of what they actually mean, they even I didn't quite capture their meaning and I really thought that you could have made the point without using them in the first place. That would have made the story more "timeless" and that would fit the story much better. Now the technical references sort of point somewhere else in the text without finding their footing.

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Re: Life after Death
« Reply #9 on: November 05, 2009, 06:56:12 AM »
Gutsy Lynx, very very gutsy. First to find the internal fortitude to write about an event that tramatic.  Second to share it with this community. But then I always knew you were a strong one. Class act all the way. <S>

I guess to me the question is was it death you experienced? Or just a very profound out of body experience?
Travel on the "Astral Plane" could in my opinion be exactly as you describe it.

Also I find myself asking "does it really matter what it was"??
You needed help, somewhere, somehow you found that. Death, Astral Travel, Mental mind games, does the source matter when your drowning in pain? I think not, all that matters is that you found a way to rise above the pain. To gain some strength from whatever source to resist it.

Personally until proven otherwise I'll take Gandalf's description of "the other side" from the Lord of the Rings.

None of us truly know what is on the other side of that final door. Not until we have passed it beyond all returning.





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Re: Life after Death
« Reply #10 on: November 05, 2009, 07:35:50 AM »
Very very interesting reading LYNX and very well written.

However I didn't like the technological references, barcode readers, MS or uploading. While they may be even unclear to somebody of what they actually mean, they even I didn't quite capture their meaning and I really thought that you could have made the point without using them in the first place. That would have made the story more "timeless" and that would fit the story much better. Now the technical references sort of point somewhere else in the text without finding their footing.

-C+

Thanks man...glad you like it and thanks for the input.  I deleted the microsoft thing....basically it was saying the same thing twice. 

Yer...The bar code thing was clumsy so I changed it to :- 

I became aware of an entity of a man walking up the cobbled road. As he passed me by I viewed all the information about him, much like a scanner would a bar code.

This way it rolls better and is easier to follow.

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Re: Life after Death
« Reply #11 on: November 05, 2009, 10:20:43 AM »

LYNX...an interesting read, sir, and one that surely is based upon personal experience.

I'd like to pass on to you a small, but powerful phrase that was passed on to me by a writing teacher: "Show, don't tell" .

If you'd like to explore that phrase further, please PM me.  :)

Keep writing, and keep reading!

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Re: Life after Death
« Reply #12 on: November 05, 2009, 10:32:33 AM »
Nice read Lynx.
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Re: Life after Death
« Reply #13 on: November 05, 2009, 10:54:29 AM »
That was an interesting read.
My grandfather "died" of a heart attack in 1974. Cardiac arrest for some 4 minutes (estimated). He, being rather UN-religious, experienced nothing but complete darkness during his unconciousness. He was jump started with an adrenaline shot, and recalled the aftermath of that quite well. "Like being cut to pieces and every piece tortured seperatly" he said. It was the kick of his blood running again after a standstill.
Anyway, he was dead for long enough to get a slight brain damage, yet not long enough to "experience" the other side.
So, that was his case. I had a different one, and managed to make a proper fool out of myself because of it.
You see, I sometimes see dead people.
Sounds like a cliche, but really, I am serious!
I know of two cases. The first one was a guy I used to work with. I was at his place (big family) and briefly met him, - just a mere salute as he passed me. I recall that I could not smell him as usually (his work left him with a definate odour). Anyway, some month or two later, I got the news that the guy had actually been dead for a year!!!
A second time was just a rough year ago. I had to go to the bank, and I noticed this old guy I know sitting in the passenger seat of his car. I waved, but he did not see me. He did not look too well, but he was quite old.
A few months later (maybe 2), I was dining with his grand daughter and her husband. I asked how the old guy was, only to get an uncomfortable answer. He died a year ago. I had missed that one.
One's brain may fail at times, but in this case I think it was nothing of the sort. Especially the first encounter, it was close, and took some few seconds. (I saw the guy after just getting his boots on). So, Ghosts I guess, which would mean some sort of an after-life.
Just my little input. I've had much more, but these two are the ones where I openly made a fool of myself, - in other cases I managed to hide it.
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Re: Life after Death
« Reply #14 on: November 05, 2009, 11:25:39 AM »
"Seeing the other side" is just your brain providing brief entertainment while it scrambles and shuts down systems in an effort to keep your core functions operational. It's well documented.