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« on: September 04, 2002, 09:17:32 AM »
After buying a domain name 1 1/2 years ago, I finally got motivated to build our shops webpage. I'm not a wenpage builder by trade and haven't ever had anybody show me much, so it's pretty much trial and error for me. I've got most of what I want on the website there. I'm gonna have a links area and a little more content. Would you guys do me a favor and check it out? Give me some feedback. Does it load ok? Does it look ok? Secretary typed some stuff up to go with the photos, Iv'e got to check for typos, etc. A couple of the photos will be replaced. I made it in frontpage 2000. Suggestions from you guys with html experience is welcome.

Here's the link...

http://www.blairautobody.com

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« Reply #1 on: September 04, 2002, 09:31:54 AM »
"When your automobile is involved in a collision, there's a good chance there will be some structural damage involved. Structural repair is often the foundation of the repair to a vehicle, if not performed correctly, occupant safety can be affected, as well as tire wear and fit and finish."

Rephrase to read:

"When your automobile is involved in a collision, there's a good chance there will be some damage to the underlying structure of the body or frame. Structural repair is the most critical repair for a vehicle,  and if its not performed correctly, then occupant safety can be affected, as well as load handling that can lead to excessive tire wear and imperfections in fit and finish."

Yes, I do mean "load" and not "road", as "load" encompasses the g-forces and road stresses of maneuvering.

Also, change the name to "GoFaster's Auto Body" and you'll really start raking in the cash.  I'll only charge you 10% of your net revenues for the use of my handle. :)

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« Reply #2 on: September 04, 2002, 09:33:02 AM »
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Blair Auto Body is an Auto collision repair shop located near Gadsden, Alabama. Specializing in late-model collision repair, we have been serving this area since 1990 in our current facility. We strive to perform the highest quality repair possible to our customers automobile. We employ capable, experienced, and certified technicians using the latest modern equipment. Many of our technicians are certified in various fields with I-CAR and ASE. Blair Auto Body is also an active member of the Alabama Collision Repairers Association (ACRA).  

 You can learn more about us and the way we repair automobiles by clicking on the linked topics on the left side of this page. Any questions or inquiries can be emailed to us here. Thank you for visiting our website.


Web site looks good, but this strikes me as a little too wordy.

how about:

Blair Auto Body is a collision repair shop specializing in late-model autos serving the Gadsden, Alabama area since 1990. Our shop not only boasts the most modern equipment, we also employ capable, experienced, I-CAR and ASE certified technicians. Blair Auto Body is also an active member of the Alabama Collision Repairers Association (ACRA).  

 Learn more about us and our quality services by clicking on the linked topics on the left side of this page. Any questions can be emailed to us here. Thank you for visiting our website


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« Reply #3 on: September 04, 2002, 09:34:44 AM »
rgr gofaster, I haven't been over much of that stuff yet. :) Some of it sounds a little cheesey. Thanks for the input.

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« Reply #4 on: September 04, 2002, 09:40:00 AM »
I have the 'master' working on it now :)

my gf is damned good at finding mistakes.. spelling, grammar, etc

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« Reply #5 on: September 04, 2002, 09:45:25 AM »
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I've been givin' ya the same advice for 6 years...

Stop flyin' the 109g10, then that groinal area rash will disappear.

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« Reply #6 on: September 04, 2002, 09:51:55 AM »
Thanks Target and Oedipus. Looks like I need to go over some of the wording. kinda too descriptive in places. Tell her to look good wlfie. :) Milenko, you're flying the wrong plane. ;)

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« Reply #7 on: September 04, 2002, 11:04:01 AM »
I like the site hblair, easy to navigate and direct. You may want to consider adding some pictures of a before and after repair, including some in progress pics.
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« Reply #8 on: September 04, 2002, 11:26:01 AM »
shot you an email of a few grammatical errors..
she is good.. uh.. at uh.. uh.. grammer :

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« Reply #9 on: September 04, 2002, 11:33:55 AM »
Loads fast, nice photos, does a good job of showing a glitzy clean shop with lots of motivated skilled technicians....but...

...where's the scantily-dressed girl?  I expect to see at least one of those when I'm looking at auto repair places.

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« Reply #10 on: September 04, 2002, 11:35:48 AM »
Make sure to post a FAQ link to that Swanky BMW board to answer all Clear-Coat questions.   :p

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« Reply #11 on: September 04, 2002, 11:43:41 AM »
That's a really good and simple effective page.

The logo showing your actual business sign is exceptionally helpful to promoting where your business is located, ironically, more so than, promoting what your business, is.

Local’s would recognize it immediately, which obviously is your consumer base.

 I’d just make a small change, that the sign graphic is as wide and high as the Header, to draw even more attention to what they will see driving into, or past.
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« Reply #12 on: September 04, 2002, 11:55:44 AM »
Looks good hblair!

Only thing was the colour of those ICAR brand on the middle left that hurt my eyes, but I guess you can't do anything about that.

I like it.
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« Reply #13 on: September 04, 2002, 11:57:00 AM »
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 I’d just make a small change, that the sign graphic is as wide and high as the Header, to draw even more attention to what they will see driving into, or past.


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« Reply #14 on: September 04, 2002, 11:57:38 AM »
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Make sure to post a FAQ link to that Swanky BMW board to answer all Clear-Coat questions.   :p

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