Hi Mustaine,
Few things I noticed in the film:
1. At 1:12 you seem to reverse ok on 109g2 but then you loose sight of him at the top.(haha funny that you later acknowledge this on vox[he crashed into the ground shortly after you lost vis])
2. At 2:23 you seem to go for a head on merge with a p51b, I noticed this pattern throughout the film with other aircraft. You could easily have set him up for a reversal and got a snapshot without the chance of him hitting you.
3. At about 6:35 you get too target fixated on the p51 and disregard the cons on your 6 closing. By the time you decide to take action theres 3 of em at d600!
4. Missing a couple easy snapshots, especially on that spit at 7:20 which could have made things easier.
So basically it is mainly a matter of working on your SA and choosing the biggest threats, your merge tactics, and a bit of gunnery. Other than that, great flying
Catch me online and maybe you can drag me into the DA