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Offline ByeBye

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« on: November 09, 2006, 01:06:35 AM »
I came up with this just now. My singing and playing a little rough. I like the idea.


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Lyrics:


Every sound you make will pass away
we want to hear more of your fine lines

Every deed undone will stay that way
and you're only getting started

If you want to live you'll have to pray
but it won't matter anyway (have faith)

  We'll lay your body down in a grave, and we'll pray
  Everything you've done just goes away, today
  But don't worry, we'll get back with you someday

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« Reply #1 on: November 09, 2006, 01:11:14 AM »
i like it. obviously you need to drink more, or less and refine the performance but overall i'd give it a good review.  

takes alot of skil the play and sing in tune and ib tine, at the same time, very well done.


whats it in reference to? a person or a place/event?

i thought person.


well done
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« Reply #2 on: November 09, 2006, 01:12:43 AM »
Put down the blunt and get your equipment off the roof
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« Reply #3 on: November 09, 2006, 01:16:24 AM »
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i like it. obviously you need to drink more, or less and refine the performance but overall i'd give it a good review.  

takes alot of skil the play and sing in tune and ib tine, at the same time, very well done.


whats it in reference to? a person or a place/event?

i thought person.


well done


Thank you!

I have been drinking a little..lol.

The idea came to me just thinking about what a life means and how relegion trys to make us feel like we mean something. It's sarcastic.

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« Reply #4 on: November 09, 2006, 01:25:03 AM »
It's about being dead.

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« Reply #5 on: November 09, 2006, 01:25:43 AM »
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I have been drinking a little..lol.




ah ha there is the answer, you need to drink ALOT! a little is never enough for music :)


being dead eh? well then it relates to all of us or will do one day. I think you got a good voice for that style of song, kinda radiohead mixed with the more lively supergrass or coldplay vibe.   of course, before sounding like other people it sounds original, which is a good thing.
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« Reply #6 on: November 09, 2006, 11:29:12 PM »
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being dead eh? well then it relates to all of us or will do one day. I think you got a good voice for that style of song, kinda radiohead mixed with the more lively supergrass or coldplay vibe.   of course, before sounding like other people it sounds original, which is a good thing.



You are a good man!

And thanks.

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« Reply #7 on: November 09, 2006, 11:32:30 PM »
Well, your getting better.
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« Reply #8 on: November 09, 2006, 11:38:17 PM »
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« Reply #9 on: November 10, 2006, 01:50:40 AM »
Well, finally listened to Nuke's "music."

You put yourself out here as being talented and great, so here it is:  you couldn't carry a tune in two buckets.

You're not much of a picker, not even a good amateur, so don't get too carried away with your fantasies. If you had an ounce of humility, as you should, I would have said something encouraging.
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« Reply #10 on: November 10, 2006, 05:06:47 AM »
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Well, finally listened to Nuke's "music."

You put yourself out here as being talented and great, so here it is:  you couldn't carry a tune in two buckets.

You're not much of a picker, not even a good amateur, so don't get too carried away with your fantasies. If you had an ounce of humility, as you should, I would have said something encouraging.


Gosh where to start.

Let's start w/ the guitar work.

1. Tune that sucker.  It sounded terrible.  Plenty of free easy tuners out there.

2. Learn to pick.  You picking was horrible.  I am guessing you are holding the pick totally wrong.  It's up down, up down btw, not down, down, up, down or how ever you were doing it.


the pick should be at @ 45 degree angle ish to the string.  It sounded like you are resting the pick flat on the strings and were using too much of the pick when you were strumming.

3. Hand position.  This is a huge one.  I hear so many screwed up notes while you were playing, and 99% I attribute to you have no clue how to properly hold your left hand while you are playing.
This what I picture you are doing.

Now, this very well might be an "ok" way to hold your hand if you are playing rock and roll, but unfort. you are playing on an accoustic, and it's 100% wrong.

Your thumb should be in the back of the neck, and helping produce the pressure on the strings.

 I could almost not stand listening to you song from all the buzzing of poorly held strings and all the dead notes because you are obviously not doing it correctly.


THIS is how it should sound.

THIS , if you add some buzzing noise from not holding the string's correctly, is how you sound.  (it's actually better than how you sound)

Wow, I could go on and on.

Now I am not saying you totally suck.  Far from it.  BUT you REALLY REALLY REALLY need some lessons.  Both vocal and guitar.

I won't even touch the vocals.  Let's just say I didn't really even hear a single note that was in tune.  It might have STARTED, or ENDED, or at some point was in tune, but not one note STAYED in tune as you were singing.

Keep practicing, get some lessons, practice lot's, and let's hear what you sound like in say six months.
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« Reply #11 on: November 10, 2006, 06:42:50 AM »
I thought that was a lot better than the other ones you posted were, it wasn't half bad I thought.

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« Reply #12 on: November 10, 2006, 07:54:46 AM »
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I thought that was a lot better than the other ones you posted were, it wasn't half bad I thought.


Lord, help us all if that was better than the other ones.

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« Reply #13 on: November 10, 2006, 08:25:00 AM »
Nuke, we tried telling you before.
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« Reply #14 on: November 10, 2006, 09:27:24 AM »
Byebye,
Nice premise.  I think you have a good idea.  Have you ever finished anything?  All you post here are demos of an idea of a premise.  Try to work on finishing something before you rush it out to your aroring fans...

As far as the nay-sayers go, I say that put in the correct environment nuke or byebye or whatever his name is might be able to pull something off.  All he's presented here are one-off demos. I personally would be embarassed to post anything he's shown so far but if you dig really deep this one might actually have something to it.

Lute,
If I had a dollar for every time some frustrated guitarist told me that I was "doing it all wrong" I'd be rich.  THERE IS NO WRONG WAY!  There's your way and there's other people's way.  I catch flak because I have a very unique technique used in conjuction with alternate tunings in which I use my thumb A LOT for root notes on E, A, and D strings.  There are two kinds of guitarists that approach me: The ones that are amazed by the sounds and chord structures I can get and those who become enraged and blow me off as a hack ("you're cheating" one guy told me...).  The thing that always kills me is the fact that the ones who blow me off are paying money to come into a club where I'm getting payed to perform...  I understand where you're coming from with this guy but to imply that there's only ONE way to play a guitar is WRONG.

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